Exam suggestions

[nspyrison]

Editorial suggestions from the first examiner from ExaminationReport.pdf.

• Chapter 1, Section 1.1 (Research questions) - It would be good to include some high-level insights for RQ 3, similar to what was done for RQ 1 and RQ 2.
  -- moved the preceding paragraphs to follow the Research questions
• Chapter 1, on the first page of the Introduction: "Wickham and Grolemund (2017) describes" -> "Wickham and Grolemund (2017) describe"
  -- one-off
• Chapter 2, on the first page of Background: "The last chapter" -> "The previous chapter"
  -- one-off
• Chapter 2, Section 2.3 - explain notations.
  -- TODO address in chapter and in appendix terminology section
• Chapter 2, Section 2.4 - "Definitions and surveys of quality metrics for the distortion of
  nonlinear reduction are given in Bertini et al. (2011). The latest, most comprehensive quantitative surveys are discussed in Espadoto et al. (2021) and Nonato and Aupetit (2018).";
• I would say "given by Bertini et al. (2011)" and "discussed by Espadoto et al. (2021) and Nonato and Aupetit (2018)." Alternatively, if you want to refer to the work, you could say "given in (Bertini et al 2011)" and "discussed in (Espadoto et al 2021) and (Nonato and Aupetit 2018)." I found this in other places throughout the thesis. Please consider changing consistently everywhere.
• NS: That is to say she prefers @citation to refer to the author(s) and [@citation] to refer to the work. Checked consistency through-out.
• Also as citation style, you have something like (Lubischew (1962)) in some places. It should be (Lubischew 1962). Please change everywhere in the thesis.
  -- Fixed this and two other more complex cases.
• Please make sure you have permission to reproduce the figure from Ribeiro et al. (Figure 2.6).
  -- [x] Made non-linear classification boundary
• I would use capital letter when referring to specific chapters, sections or figures in the text (similar to proper names). For example, on the first page of Chapter 3, I would change "tours were introduced in chapter 2." to "tours were introduced in Chapter 2."
  -- Fixed a case in the appendix and clarified another referencing chaper name in Chapter 5.
• I found at least a link that was not working, specifically the link to PC4 on page 38. Please doublecheck all links.
  -- source file has been corrected. appendix short.url.at have been changed to tinyurl.com
• You mention purple clusters in several places. I don't see purple myself. Should that be "blue"?
  --We are following the colorbrewer Dark2 pallette https://colorbrewer2.org/#type=qualitative&scheme=Dark2&n=3
• Chapter 4. For completeness, it would be useful to provide the information that was used to instruct and train the crowdsourcing authors. At the link you provided, I could only identify material relevant to the paper/chapter. If it's there and I missed it, that information should be reorganized/renamed to make it easier to find.
  -- TODO add vimeo video to thesis and spinifex_study/paper. Video uploaded to https://vimeo.com/712674984.
• One final careful proofreading is still needed. I found some small issues (an extra to, of, some sentences without a verb, some sentences that don't read well, etc.) in several places
  throughout the thesis.

[nspyrison]

Also would be ideal to have changes to chapter 4 as discussed with Kim.

• discussion
• Is there a figure showing radial tour? [paper only]
• soft limit of 12 pages 15 for surveys. confounded with the large visuals...
• Figure 3, label the right pane or see if a key works better (cluster label)

Results:

• subjective measures; add more information:

• parse into a few paragraphs and explain better

• discussion of the significance; give content

• add Discussion (before the conclusions) that embeds the study in related work
  -- Relate to Sedlmair paper; do they use interaction? would you want to use multiple
  -- When PCA is used maybe interaction needs to include.

PAPER only, not thesis:

Background:

• Background to "Related Work"

• mention; Grinstein et al. (2002) Liu et al. (2017)
  -- keep in mind that paragraph was used

• work in Multivariate data vis:
  ~Grinstein et al. (2002) Liu et al. (2017) & splom, pcp, coordinated views, Interaction, etc
  -- Multi Dim Projections (and motivation for Linear)
  need a segue
  --- Linear
  needs content
  --- Nonlinear
  needs content

• better explanation of radial tour. (In intro over related work)

• empirical eval doesn't need to go into as much detail, elmqvist is important.