update chapter 6 ending

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@@ -145,17 +145,20 @@ _Swoosh!_
 
 I glance behind me to see an arrow sticking out of his shoulder.
 
-I look to the hills. Uncle Thenarius! He's standing with his bow drawn, ready to loose another arrow. His eyes sear with confidence as he releases the bowstring. The arrow finds its mark as the rockbiter tries to stand, striking him in the leg and ending the chase.
+I look to the hills. Uncle Thenarius! He’s standing with his bow drawn, ready to loose another arrow. How did he get the galviron manacles off?! His eyes sear with confidence as he releases the bowstring. The arrow finds its mark as the rockbiter tries to stand, striking him in the leg and ending the chase.
 
-I take this opportunity to stand up and limp toward Sorrowe. When she reaches me, she takes my arm over her shoulder and helps me walk. I see Hope peering over the top of the hill with a frown across her face.
+I take this opportunity to stand up and limp toward Sorrowe. When she reaches me, she takes my arm over her shoulder and helps me walk. I see Hope peering over the top of the hill.
 
-The rockbiter lets out an exasperated grunt as he limps back toward the cabin. "Don't show your face around here again, scum!" Another rockbiter appears from the side of the house, runs to his ally, and helps him up.
+The rockbiter lets out an exasperated grunt as he limps back toward the cabin. "Don't show your face around here again, scum!" Another rockbiter appears from the side of the house and runs to his ally.
 
 Sorrowe and I move hastily up the hill, causing my leg to sting with pain.
 
-How did he resist my magic? Everything I’ve ever pointed fire at has burned, many times on accident. Yet this… _rockbiter_ stood in the middle of my flames like they were a soft rain.
+How did he resist my magic? Everything I’ve ever pointed fire at has burned, many times on accident. Yet this… _rockbiter_ stood in the middle of my flames as if they were a soft rain. I shudder at the thought.
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+As Sorrowe and I crest the hill, Hope runs toward me with her horns, eyes, and hands already alight with restoration magic.
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+Broken manacles dangle from her belt.
 
-I shudder at the thought and grimace in pain as I crest the hill and see Hope — horns, eyes, and hands alight — running toward me.
 
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